四級(jí)寫作經(jīng)典范文及點(diǎn)評(píng):志愿者
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世界因?yàn)閻?ài)心而變得溫暖，人與人的互相幫助讓我們的生活變得更加美好。志愿者就是這樣的人。因?yàn)橛辛怂麄儯覀兊纳鐣?huì)才更加和諧。
Volunteers
Each nation has many good people who help to take care of others.① For example, some high school and college students in the United States often spend many hours as volunteers in hospitals, orphanages or homes for the aged. They read books to the people in these places, or they just visit them or listen to their problems. Other young volunteers go and work in the homes of people who are sick or old. They paint, clean up, or repair houses, do their shopping and mow their lawns.② For boys who no longer have fathers there is an organization called Big Brothers. College students and other men take these boys to basketball games or on fishing trips and help them to get to know things that boys usually learn from their fathers.
Some cities have a number of clubs where boys and girls can go to play games or learn crafts. Some of these clubs show movies or organize short trips to the mountains, the beaches, museums or other places of interest. Most of these clubs use a lot of high school and college students as volunteers because they are young enough to remember the problems of younger boys and girls.
Volunteers believe that some of the happiest people in the world are those who help to bring happiness to others.
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行文點(diǎn)評(píng)
本文談?wù)摰氖侵驹刚邌?wèn)題。文章開(kāi)始談到每個(gè)國(guó)家都有許多善良的人愿意幫助照顧別人。并舉出實(shí)例支持論點(diǎn)，然后描述了學(xué)生志愿者所做的不同工作。第二段從另一個(gè)角度分析一些組織也喜歡用學(xué)生做志愿者。最后一段言簡(jiǎn)意賅地闡述了志愿者的信念。
本文大量舉例使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)而具體。some ... other結(jié)構(gòu)的大量運(yùn)用，使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)更加清晰。
好文妙譯
志愿者
每個(gè)國(guó)家都有許多善良的人們幫助照顧別人。例如，美國(guó)的一些高中生和大學(xué)生經(jīng)常花大量時(shí)間在醫(yī)院、孤兒院或老人院做志愿者。他們給患者、孩子和老人讀書，或只是看望他們或聽(tīng)他們傾訴問(wèn)題。另外一些青年志愿者則到病人或老人家中工作。他們涂刷墻面、打掃衛(wèi)生或修理房屋、幫助購(gòu)物、修整草坪。對(duì)那些不再有父親的男孩子，有一個(gè)被稱作“兄弟聯(lián)誼會(huì)”的組織。大學(xué)生或其他男性帶這些孩子參加籃球賽、外出釣魚(yú)或幫助他們了解那些男孩子通常從父親那兒學(xué)會(huì)的事情。
一些城市中有許多俱樂(lè)部，男孩和女孩可以去那里玩游戲或?qū)W手藝。有些俱樂(lè)部還放映電影或組織短途旅行，比如爬山、游覽海灘、參觀博物館或其他名勝。大部分俱樂(lè)部用很多高中生和大學(xué)生作志愿者，因?yàn)樗麄兡贻p，還記得更年幼的孩子們的問(wèn)題。
志愿者相信世界上有一部分最幸福的人就是那些給別人帶來(lái)快樂(lè)的人。
詞匯斟酌
?orphanage n. 孤兒院
?mow v. 割草，除草
?lawn n. 草地，草坪
?craft n. 工藝，手藝
?organize vt. 組織，編組
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】take care of照顧
【臨摹】You’d better send for her tomorrow to take care of the children.你最好明天請(qǐng)她來(lái)照顧孩子們。
②【注釋】clean up打掃干凈
【臨摹】It’s your turn to clean the bedroom up.輪到你收拾臥室了。
思如泉涌
The love that lasts longest is the love that is never returned.永恒的愛(ài)是無(wú)需回報(bào)的愛(ài)。
Virtue is bold, and goodness never fearful.美德是勇敢的，善良從來(lái)無(wú)所畏懼。品格修養(yǎng)篇
Volunteers
Each nation has many good people who help to take care of others.① For example, some high school and college students in the United States often spend many hours as volunteers in hospitals, orphanages or homes for the aged. They read books to the people in these places, or they just visit them or listen to their problems. Other young volunteers go and work in the homes of people who are sick or old. They paint, clean up, or repair houses, do their shopping and mow their lawns.② For boys who no longer have fathers there is an organization called Big Brothers. College students and other men take these boys to basketball games or on fishing trips and help them to get to know things that boys usually learn from their fathers.
Some cities have a number of clubs where boys and girls can go to play games or learn crafts. Some of these clubs show movies or organize short trips to the mountains, the beaches, museums or other places of interest. Most of these clubs use a lot of high school and college students as volunteers because they are young enough to remember the problems of younger boys and girls.
Volunteers believe that some of the happiest people in the world are those who help to bring happiness to others.
［222 words］
行文點(diǎn)評(píng)
本文談?wù)摰氖侵驹刚邌?wèn)題。文章開(kāi)始談到每個(gè)國(guó)家都有許多善良的人愿意幫助照顧別人。并舉出實(shí)例支持論點(diǎn)，然后描述了學(xué)生志愿者所做的不同工作。第二段從另一個(gè)角度分析一些組織也喜歡用學(xué)生做志愿者。最后一段言簡(jiǎn)意賅地闡述了志愿者的信念。
本文大量舉例使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)而具體。some ... other結(jié)構(gòu)的大量運(yùn)用，使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)更加清晰。
好文妙譯
志愿者
每個(gè)國(guó)家都有許多善良的人們幫助照顧別人。例如，美國(guó)的一些高中生和大學(xué)生經(jīng)常花大量時(shí)間在醫(yī)院、孤兒院或老人院做志愿者。他們給患者、孩子和老人讀書，或只是看望他們或聽(tīng)他們傾訴問(wèn)題。另外一些青年志愿者則到病人或老人家中工作。他們涂刷墻面、打掃衛(wèi)生或修理房屋、幫助購(gòu)物、修整草坪。對(duì)那些不再有父親的男孩子，有一個(gè)被稱作“兄弟聯(lián)誼會(huì)”的組織。大學(xué)生或其他男性帶這些孩子參加籃球賽、外出釣魚(yú)或幫助他們了解那些男孩子通常從父親那兒學(xué)會(huì)的事情。
一些城市中有許多俱樂(lè)部，男孩和女孩可以去那里玩游戲或?qū)W手藝。有些俱樂(lè)部還放映電影或組織短途旅行，比如爬山、游覽海灘、參觀博物館或其他名勝。大部分俱樂(lè)部用很多高中生和大學(xué)生作志愿者，因?yàn)樗麄兡贻p，還記得更年幼的孩子們的問(wèn)題。
志愿者相信世界上有一部分最幸福的人就是那些給別人帶來(lái)快樂(lè)的人。
詞匯斟酌
?orphanage n. 孤兒院
?mow v. 割草，除草
?lawn n. 草地，草坪
?craft n. 工藝，手藝
?organize vt. 組織，編組
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】take care of照顧
【臨摹】You’d better send for her tomorrow to take care of the children.你最好明天請(qǐng)她來(lái)照顧孩子們。
②【注釋】clean up打掃干凈
【臨摹】It’s your turn to clean the bedroom up.輪到你收拾臥室了。
思如泉涌
The love that lasts longest is the love that is never returned.永恒的愛(ài)是無(wú)需回報(bào)的愛(ài)。
Virtue is bold, and goodness never fearful.美德是勇敢的，善良從來(lái)無(wú)所畏懼。品格修養(yǎng)篇