四級(jí)寫作經(jīng)典范文及點(diǎn)評(píng):手機(jī)影響學(xué)習(xí)嗎?
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英語四級(jí)作文
在大學(xué)校園里,手機(jī)的普及率越來越高。對(duì)于許多學(xué)生而言,手機(jī)已經(jīng)成為他們必不可少的通訊工具。但是手機(jī)的普及也存在著許多問題,它可能會(huì)影響我們的正常學(xué)習(xí)。
Do Mobiles Distract Study?
Wherever you are, you can see many people equipped with mobile phones. It seems that the world becomes smaller nowadays. You could be found wherever you are so long as you take the mobile phone with you. And mobile phones are also becoming a new scene on campus.
Students think it is extremely convenient for them to communicate with the outside world by using mobile phones, especially when they are hunting for jobs, so they call it an essential investment.
Education experts analyze the entry of mobile phones into campus as an indication of social progress. And mobile phones have been considered advanced for its attractive functions. The youth of today send messages, surf on the net, listen to music and even take photos by using their mobile phones. To some extent, it reflects that college students are more and more involved in this modern society, rather than pedants in the “Ivory Tower”.①
As a coin has two sides, the mobile phone, while providing convenience, causes trouble too. In classrooms, the untimely ringing interrupts lectures and destroys the atmosphere of study, so it prompts many complaints. And the mobile phone users themselves also suffer.
Therefore, we need to think more about how to integrate mobile phones properly into our lives.②
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行文點(diǎn)評(píng)
文章由現(xiàn)象到本質(zhì),分為五個(gè)段落層次分明地對(duì)主題進(jìn)行了論述。第一段由普遍現(xiàn)象進(jìn)而引出話題,指出手機(jī)已經(jīng)成為校園里的a new scene,說明討論的內(nèi)容是關(guān)于校園使用手機(jī)的問題。第二段中,作者從學(xué)生的角度切入,肯定了手機(jī)給生活帶來的便利,引起學(xué)生的共鳴,為后面觀點(diǎn)的提出作了很好的鋪墊。第三段作者從專家的角度指出手機(jī)進(jìn)入校園是社會(huì)進(jìn)步的體現(xiàn),增加說服力。第四段引出作者的觀點(diǎn),并舉出校園實(shí)例論證自己的觀點(diǎn)。最后一段用therefore總結(jié)全文,提出呼吁。
文章行文流暢,第二段、第三段的首句采用了表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)的常用句型:Students think …;Education experts analyze …使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。第四段用諺語a coin has two sides引出作者觀點(diǎn)。最后一段:讓手機(jī)適當(dāng)?shù)厝谌胛覀兊纳睿菍?duì)文章標(biāo)題的有力回應(yīng),properly一詞充分表明了作者對(duì)問題的認(rèn)識(shí)以及建議。
好文妙譯
手機(jī)影響學(xué)習(xí)嗎?
無論你在何地,你都會(huì)看見許多人使用手機(jī)。如今,世界似乎越來越小了,只要你帶上手機(jī)出門,不管你在哪兒,你都會(huì)被找到。而在大學(xué)校園里,手機(jī)也已經(jīng)成為了一道新的風(fēng)景。
學(xué)生們認(rèn)為,手機(jī)可以讓他們非常便利地與外界聯(lián)系,特別是當(dāng)他們找工作的時(shí)候,所以他們認(rèn)為這是個(gè)必要的投資。
教育專家分析,手機(jī)進(jìn)入校園是社會(huì)進(jìn)步的體現(xiàn)。手機(jī)已經(jīng)成為非常先進(jìn)的科技產(chǎn)物,具有各種吸引人的功能。現(xiàn)在的年青人喜歡用手機(jī)發(fā)短信、上因特網(wǎng)、聽音樂、甚至拍照。在某種程度上,這反映了大學(xué)生越來越融入這個(gè)現(xiàn)代社會(huì),而不是待在“象牙塔”里的書呆子。
正如硬幣都有兩面一樣,手機(jī)在提供方便的同時(shí),也產(chǎn)生了一些問題。在教室里,不合時(shí)宜地響起的手機(jī)鈴聲不但打斷了上課,而且破壞了學(xué)習(xí)的氣氛,因此引起了諸多抱怨。手機(jī)使用者自己也同樣是受害者。
因此,我們應(yīng)該更多地想想如何使手機(jī)適當(dāng)?shù)厝谌胛覀兊纳睢?br/> 詞匯斟酌
?pedant n. 學(xué)究式人物
?untimely a. 時(shí)間上不適當(dāng)?shù)模贿m時(shí)的
?integrate v. 使成整體,使一體化
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】to some extent在某種程度上,
【臨摹】To some extent, I am responsible for the delay.在某種程度上,我對(duì)拖延負(fù)有責(zé)任。
②【注釋】integrate... into使…并入,使成為一體
【臨摹】Many young people successfully integrated themselves into their new surroundings.許多年輕人成功地同新的環(huán)境打成一片。
思如泉涌
Whether you like it or not, the mobile phone has already affected our lives and played an important role in the history of human beings.無論你喜不喜歡手機(jī),它已經(jīng)改變了我們的生活,并在人類歷史上發(fā)揮著重要的作用。
Whatever you do, do with all your might.不管做什么,都要一心一意。
Do Mobiles Distract Study?
Wherever you are, you can see many people equipped with mobile phones. It seems that the world becomes smaller nowadays. You could be found wherever you are so long as you take the mobile phone with you. And mobile phones are also becoming a new scene on campus.
Students think it is extremely convenient for them to communicate with the outside world by using mobile phones, especially when they are hunting for jobs, so they call it an essential investment.
Education experts analyze the entry of mobile phones into campus as an indication of social progress. And mobile phones have been considered advanced for its attractive functions. The youth of today send messages, surf on the net, listen to music and even take photos by using their mobile phones. To some extent, it reflects that college students are more and more involved in this modern society, rather than pedants in the “Ivory Tower”.①
As a coin has two sides, the mobile phone, while providing convenience, causes trouble too. In classrooms, the untimely ringing interrupts lectures and destroys the atmosphere of study, so it prompts many complaints. And the mobile phone users themselves also suffer.
Therefore, we need to think more about how to integrate mobile phones properly into our lives.②
[214 words]
行文點(diǎn)評(píng)
文章由現(xiàn)象到本質(zhì),分為五個(gè)段落層次分明地對(duì)主題進(jìn)行了論述。第一段由普遍現(xiàn)象進(jìn)而引出話題,指出手機(jī)已經(jīng)成為校園里的a new scene,說明討論的內(nèi)容是關(guān)于校園使用手機(jī)的問題。第二段中,作者從學(xué)生的角度切入,肯定了手機(jī)給生活帶來的便利,引起學(xué)生的共鳴,為后面觀點(diǎn)的提出作了很好的鋪墊。第三段作者從專家的角度指出手機(jī)進(jìn)入校園是社會(huì)進(jìn)步的體現(xiàn),增加說服力。第四段引出作者的觀點(diǎn),并舉出校園實(shí)例論證自己的觀點(diǎn)。最后一段用therefore總結(jié)全文,提出呼吁。
文章行文流暢,第二段、第三段的首句采用了表達(dá)觀點(diǎn)的常用句型:Students think …;Education experts analyze …使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。第四段用諺語a coin has two sides引出作者觀點(diǎn)。最后一段:讓手機(jī)適當(dāng)?shù)厝谌胛覀兊纳睿菍?duì)文章標(biāo)題的有力回應(yīng),properly一詞充分表明了作者對(duì)問題的認(rèn)識(shí)以及建議。
好文妙譯
手機(jī)影響學(xué)習(xí)嗎?
無論你在何地,你都會(huì)看見許多人使用手機(jī)。如今,世界似乎越來越小了,只要你帶上手機(jī)出門,不管你在哪兒,你都會(huì)被找到。而在大學(xué)校園里,手機(jī)也已經(jīng)成為了一道新的風(fēng)景。
學(xué)生們認(rèn)為,手機(jī)可以讓他們非常便利地與外界聯(lián)系,特別是當(dāng)他們找工作的時(shí)候,所以他們認(rèn)為這是個(gè)必要的投資。
教育專家分析,手機(jī)進(jìn)入校園是社會(huì)進(jìn)步的體現(xiàn)。手機(jī)已經(jīng)成為非常先進(jìn)的科技產(chǎn)物,具有各種吸引人的功能。現(xiàn)在的年青人喜歡用手機(jī)發(fā)短信、上因特網(wǎng)、聽音樂、甚至拍照。在某種程度上,這反映了大學(xué)生越來越融入這個(gè)現(xiàn)代社會(huì),而不是待在“象牙塔”里的書呆子。
正如硬幣都有兩面一樣,手機(jī)在提供方便的同時(shí),也產(chǎn)生了一些問題。在教室里,不合時(shí)宜地響起的手機(jī)鈴聲不但打斷了上課,而且破壞了學(xué)習(xí)的氣氛,因此引起了諸多抱怨。手機(jī)使用者自己也同樣是受害者。
因此,我們應(yīng)該更多地想想如何使手機(jī)適當(dāng)?shù)厝谌胛覀兊纳睢?br/> 詞匯斟酌
?pedant n. 學(xué)究式人物
?untimely a. 時(shí)間上不適當(dāng)?shù)模贿m時(shí)的
?integrate v. 使成整體,使一體化
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】to some extent在某種程度上,
【臨摹】To some extent, I am responsible for the delay.在某種程度上,我對(duì)拖延負(fù)有責(zé)任。
②【注釋】integrate... into使…并入,使成為一體
【臨摹】Many young people successfully integrated themselves into their new surroundings.許多年輕人成功地同新的環(huán)境打成一片。
思如泉涌
Whether you like it or not, the mobile phone has already affected our lives and played an important role in the history of human beings.無論你喜不喜歡手機(jī),它已經(jīng)改變了我們的生活,并在人類歷史上發(fā)揮著重要的作用。
Whatever you do, do with all your might.不管做什么,都要一心一意。