六級寫作范文及點評:大眾演講經驗談
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一言之辯重于九鼎之寶;三寸之舌強于百萬雄師。一場優秀的演說能產生巨大的效應。可是，這其中有個最大的前提就是要戰勝自己，做到收放自如，輕松脫口而出。
Speaking of the Devil
Why do smart, articulate, and self-confident people often become terrified in front of a group? How could death rank just seventh in a national survey of the top ten experiences Americans dread most, and public speaking first? Think about it: We’d rather kick the bucket than address an audience①!
It starts in elementary school when a teacher singles us out to “speak up”. Remember the panic of producing the wrong answer? Our palms sweated, we might have been short of breath， and filled with trembling knees, nausea, a stomachache, and a rapid heartbeat. We felt awkward and dumb.
As adults, we’re still afraid we’ll make fools of ourselves. We worry that listeners will think we are lightweights. And we should worry.
Public speaking isn’t just a sweet skill to have. Being a first-rate orator can lead to job promotions and personal advancement, while being a lousy one is a disadvantage.
One way to feel more comfortable on the stage is by checking out the room in advance, observing the set-up, and testing any equipment you’ll be using.
Some speaking specialists suggest opening with a provocative question, or a recent news event that relates to your topic. Other coaches think adding a little tasteful humor can liven up the talk if the subject is suitable.
As important as the words is the delivery. A study of audience reaction to speeches revealed that listeners remember just 7 percent of what is said, 38% of how it is said，and 55% of the speaker’s body language.
And speaking of anxiety, some people like to get up in front of a group, but most don’t As Mark Twain once said, “There are two kinds of speakers: those that are nervous and those that are liars.”
［321 words］
行文點評
本文本身就是一篇很好的演說稿。文章語言生動,很貼近聽眾,如文中出現的kick the bucket 這樣的俚語。文章以問句形式開始, 首句用一個why提出疑問：我們為什么害怕在眾人面前發言？從而吸引讀者繼續聆聽克服演講恐懼的建議。
第二、三段就此問題談了對公眾演講懼怕的原因。作者按照時間順序，首先在第二段描寫了小時候產生恐慌的具體表現和原因，很容易讓聽眾聯想到自己的親身經歷。接著在下一段說明懼怕公眾演講的原因和消極影響。作者非常自然地在第四、五段提出了幾點克服演講恐懼的建議。其中One way to..., Some suggest... Other think... 這樣的句型把作者的幾點建議自然分開，使文章內容連貫緊湊。第六段首句用一個as...as...句型引出與演講內容同樣重要的內容傳遞方式。最后文章以馬克·吐溫的話作結尾，發人深省。
好文妙譯
大眾演講經驗談
為什么聰明絕頂、伶牙俐齒、充滿自信的人站在人群面前發言時會忐忑不安呢？為什么死亡在美國人最害怕的十件事的全國調查中只名列第七而公眾演講卻名列榜首呢？想想看:我們寧愿一死也不愿在人前發言！
在小學時，老師把我們挑出來“發言”,此時這種恐懼就產生了。還記得答錯問題時的恐慌嗎？我們的手心會出汗,我們可能還會呼吸困難、兩膝發軟、惡心、肚子痛、心跳加快。我們感到尷尬，好像失去了知覺。
長大后，我們仍擔心出丑。我們擔心聽眾會認為我們思想淺薄,我們當然會有這種擔心。
公眾演講不僅僅是一種招人喜歡的技能。一個出色的演說者能獲得升遷和個人更好的發展機會，而嘴笨卻成了一個不利條件。
要想在演講臺上覺得更舒適，其中的一個辦法是預先看一下場地，看一下布置，測試一下你要用的設備。
有些演講專家建議演講的開頭可以提一些發人深省的問題或講一些與你的演講主題有關的新聞。還有一些培訓專家認為只要內容合適,添加一些有意思的小幽默可以活躍氣氛。
與演講內容同樣重要的是傳遞內容的方式。一項關于聽眾對演講反應的研究表明，聽眾對一次演講能夠記住的7%是演講內容，演講方式占38%，而演講者的肢體語言占55%。
說起焦慮,有些人愿意在人前炫耀，而多數人不愿意這樣做。正如馬克·吐溫所說的那樣：“演講者有兩種：緊張的和撒謊的。”
詞匯斟酌
?devil n.①魔鬼，惡魔②家伙，人
?elementary a.①基本的②初級的，基礎的，小學的
?single sb. out 把某人挑出來
?panic n. 驚恐，恐慌
?palm n.手掌，掌狀物
?trembling a.發抖的, 擔心的, 戰栗的
?nausea n.反胃, 暈船, 惡心, 作嘔, 極度的不快
?awkward a.尷尬的，棘手的
?dumb a.①啞的②(因驚恐等)說不出話的，沉默的
?lightweight n.輕量級選手, 不能勝任者
?orator n.演說者, 演講者, 雄辯家
?provocation n.激怒, 刺激, 挑釁, 挑撥
?reveal vt.①揭露，泄露②展現，顯示
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】kick the bucket <俚> 死；翹辮子
【臨摹】The small child hopes all the evil in the cartoon kick the bucket.這個小孩希望動畫片里所有的魔鬼都翹辮子。
思如泉涌
Every man is his own worst enemy. 一個人最大的敵人就是他自己。
A flow of words is no proof of wisdom. 口若懸河不能作為才智的證明。
Speaking of the Devil
Why do smart, articulate, and self-confident people often become terrified in front of a group? How could death rank just seventh in a national survey of the top ten experiences Americans dread most, and public speaking first? Think about it: We’d rather kick the bucket than address an audience①!
It starts in elementary school when a teacher singles us out to “speak up”. Remember the panic of producing the wrong answer? Our palms sweated, we might have been short of breath， and filled with trembling knees, nausea, a stomachache, and a rapid heartbeat. We felt awkward and dumb.
As adults, we’re still afraid we’ll make fools of ourselves. We worry that listeners will think we are lightweights. And we should worry.
Public speaking isn’t just a sweet skill to have. Being a first-rate orator can lead to job promotions and personal advancement, while being a lousy one is a disadvantage.
One way to feel more comfortable on the stage is by checking out the room in advance, observing the set-up, and testing any equipment you’ll be using.
Some speaking specialists suggest opening with a provocative question, or a recent news event that relates to your topic. Other coaches think adding a little tasteful humor can liven up the talk if the subject is suitable.
As important as the words is the delivery. A study of audience reaction to speeches revealed that listeners remember just 7 percent of what is said, 38% of how it is said，and 55% of the speaker’s body language.
And speaking of anxiety, some people like to get up in front of a group, but most don’t As Mark Twain once said, “There are two kinds of speakers: those that are nervous and those that are liars.”
［321 words］
行文點評
本文本身就是一篇很好的演說稿。文章語言生動,很貼近聽眾,如文中出現的kick the bucket 這樣的俚語。文章以問句形式開始, 首句用一個why提出疑問：我們為什么害怕在眾人面前發言？從而吸引讀者繼續聆聽克服演講恐懼的建議。
第二、三段就此問題談了對公眾演講懼怕的原因。作者按照時間順序，首先在第二段描寫了小時候產生恐慌的具體表現和原因，很容易讓聽眾聯想到自己的親身經歷。接著在下一段說明懼怕公眾演講的原因和消極影響。作者非常自然地在第四、五段提出了幾點克服演講恐懼的建議。其中One way to..., Some suggest... Other think... 這樣的句型把作者的幾點建議自然分開，使文章內容連貫緊湊。第六段首句用一個as...as...句型引出與演講內容同樣重要的內容傳遞方式。最后文章以馬克·吐溫的話作結尾，發人深省。
好文妙譯
大眾演講經驗談
為什么聰明絕頂、伶牙俐齒、充滿自信的人站在人群面前發言時會忐忑不安呢？為什么死亡在美國人最害怕的十件事的全國調查中只名列第七而公眾演講卻名列榜首呢？想想看:我們寧愿一死也不愿在人前發言！
在小學時，老師把我們挑出來“發言”,此時這種恐懼就產生了。還記得答錯問題時的恐慌嗎？我們的手心會出汗,我們可能還會呼吸困難、兩膝發軟、惡心、肚子痛、心跳加快。我們感到尷尬，好像失去了知覺。
長大后，我們仍擔心出丑。我們擔心聽眾會認為我們思想淺薄,我們當然會有這種擔心。
公眾演講不僅僅是一種招人喜歡的技能。一個出色的演說者能獲得升遷和個人更好的發展機會，而嘴笨卻成了一個不利條件。
要想在演講臺上覺得更舒適，其中的一個辦法是預先看一下場地，看一下布置，測試一下你要用的設備。
有些演講專家建議演講的開頭可以提一些發人深省的問題或講一些與你的演講主題有關的新聞。還有一些培訓專家認為只要內容合適,添加一些有意思的小幽默可以活躍氣氛。
與演講內容同樣重要的是傳遞內容的方式。一項關于聽眾對演講反應的研究表明，聽眾對一次演講能夠記住的7%是演講內容，演講方式占38%，而演講者的肢體語言占55%。
說起焦慮,有些人愿意在人前炫耀，而多數人不愿意這樣做。正如馬克·吐溫所說的那樣：“演講者有兩種：緊張的和撒謊的。”
詞匯斟酌
?devil n.①魔鬼，惡魔②家伙，人
?elementary a.①基本的②初級的，基礎的，小學的
?single sb. out 把某人挑出來
?panic n. 驚恐，恐慌
?palm n.手掌，掌狀物
?trembling a.發抖的, 擔心的, 戰栗的
?nausea n.反胃, 暈船, 惡心, 作嘔, 極度的不快
?awkward a.尷尬的，棘手的
?dumb a.①啞的②(因驚恐等)說不出話的，沉默的
?lightweight n.輕量級選手, 不能勝任者
?orator n.演說者, 演講者, 雄辯家
?provocation n.激怒, 刺激, 挑釁, 挑撥
?reveal vt.①揭露，泄露②展現，顯示
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】kick the bucket <俚> 死；翹辮子
【臨摹】The small child hopes all the evil in the cartoon kick the bucket.這個小孩希望動畫片里所有的魔鬼都翹辮子。
思如泉涌
Every man is his own worst enemy. 一個人最大的敵人就是他自己。
A flow of words is no proof of wisdom. 口若懸河不能作為才智的證明。